Androsia - The Queen of Crows

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The world design and story is well laid out. The characters have personality which draw you further into the storyline, which can be a little fast paced, so strap in. For the author, I would suggest re-reading through and making the dialogue a little less stiff, or more natural, by breaking up the dialogue with action tags and replacing words like them or there with more dynamic verbiage. I think this is one thing that's making the pacing feel rushed in some places. I'm looking forward to seeing the aura system being more fleshed out!

World Background: The world building in this story is quite messy and not fully clear. I'm aware this is medieval fantasy, but I'm still don't get the clear image for this world. Therefore, I suggest to give more description about the surroundings and maybe a detail to make it more flesh out. As for the power system or Aura in this book, I suggested to develop more the mechanic of how it really works by either showing more the capability and describe the feel when the power is activated. Character: I believe the characters is pretty okay and serviceable at best. The main character so far it's fine and I do like she will have future development regarding her power and the treatment of the evil knights. While the side characters is just alright, but the author can fleshing out them more by giving more role and personality. I also like the author already introduce the significant Antagonistic in the early chapter. Pace: I think the pace is okay, but sometimes I felt too fast. Overall, it's quite good fantasy novel and I can see great potential with the elements provided in this novel. Good luck!!

Really well written, the story progresses fast but it’s really intriguing. Very few grammatical errors makes it a really easy read. Looking forward to how the author develops the story and what is going to happen with the princess!

The story is good. It has decent grammar and I have liked the writing quality of the novel very much. Short and readable paragraphs with decent grammar and structures are used very well. The story is dark with how the knights and Mr lewis were as humans. But I liked how realistic and dark the novel is about in medieval ages. The character design is just satisfactory level with no clear personalities YET. The stability of updates is good with 3 chapter/day. The problem is with world-building. I don't know what kind of world is it. And what are the laws and rules the novel world has? I have neither understood how the aura works. The fight scenes require some more action and detail. I don't how many races are there and which races the main character has . The side characters are not up to the mark. I suggest you to have a proper plan in world building . Even little details and basic rules will do. And how aura works that's it

Its not a totally bad read. its just the story develops too fast and abrupt the grammar is not too bad(I wouldn't know if it was) the characters need a little more depth in the first few chapters. another choice is to make them a little mysterious. the book is great i would recommend it to friends.