A Collection of Criticism

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Rise Of Legends:Machine Vs Magic

The quest for power is splitting the land of Aio apart. You either chose the technical ingenuity of the Vinci army or the mystical might of the Alin army. But Ling doesn't want to choose. But when she accidentally unleashes an ancient power within her she must travel through Aio and lands beyond to prevent the two warring armies and stop the evil manipulating both sides.

Naruto: divine wishes

I don't own Naruto Have a great day guys

Ethan and Maya: Love story

A boy who married his bff

Rise of sin

Hiesel

HiTsuki - 10 Days Knowing You

The last thing Diana remembers is saving a boy at waterfall before a huge wave of water comes from upper level of waterfall and hits her body. And when she gains her conscious back, she cannot move her body at all except her ears catch some echos from surroundings. Few months later during the night of Blue and Cold Moon, Vita Kingdom receives their newly born princess, Princess Luna Diana II de Vio. Everyone celebrates joyously their most awaited princess's birthday for 7 days 7 nights and for the princess, she tries to adapt to the new world she resides now. With knowledge in her past life, she leads her new life to accomplish her promises that she had swore upon herself which she couldn't complete due to the accident happened to her. During her journey, under the light of dusk, she once meets a sleeping boy who is left alone in a burnt garden. The boy resembles a bit with her idol during her past life, so Diana decides to accompany the poor boy to cheer him up as she does not want that face to feel any other than happiness. She becomes his playmate for all 10 days she is there of visiting Ares Empire, without knowing the boy is the hidden sole heir of Ares emperor, Prince Lucifer Ruaidhri Aiden ElGrian Ua Arcerius. Author's message: This is my main novel among all my novels that I wrote or will write in future. Few hints/spoilers about this novel will be shown in other short novels that I made too. Feel free to read ^^

Soldier Boy

In the jungles of Vietnam, First Lieutenant Stu Willis met Private Richmond Patterson and fell hard for the new recruit. Their brief romance burned bright, but the very war that brought them together finally tore them apart.<br><br>This isn't the happy-ever-after you're looking for, but it is one of the best stories I've written to date. So consider yourself warned.

The Great Alpha System

In the past , there was no light , no joy , no pain , no laughter , no regrets, . It was just me ,me and an eternity of darkness, then i created the heavens , i created a place for me , i created my followers . I guess it was quite fun. For a God like me protecting , creating, was one of my specialty as i love it like so. so i created many dimensions , many universe , many live , at least it reduced the darkness. But as they say good things don't last . things started going wrong. Then , things started going wrong when one of my own followers desired my spot , my spot as a God as king of all living. He went against me and my every will.and the worst part is that, i can't Kill him , after all he is one of my creation . So i locked him up far away from my every creation of mine , but am sure it wouldn't hold him for long . i just feel it and am sure his coming back . "since you are the king of all live , I'll be king of all deaths" he said as he laughed out loud ."Hahahahahahahahah'" Right now am going to do something i never thought I'll do I think Ill need help from one of my own creations . _____&&&&&&_________---&&&&&&& This book actually has 4sides, for you to understand the book fully you need to read all 4 sides. (Note , this story is not a werewolf based story, am trying to creat a new Parth of fantasy just need your support ) My first time writing so first few chapters might not be that good it get better at chapter 16

My senior just My Imagination

Shila seorang gadis yang berwatak judes dan sombong dan Ali senior yang memiliki perwatakan yang berubah ubah setiap saat, kisah ini bermula Pada saat Shila memasuki Dunia Kampusnya, menjatuhkan hati pada pandangan pertama pada seniornya sendiri. Paras Ali yang terbilang begitu manis membuat Shila merasa tertantang untuk menakluk kan hati Ali, akan kah Shila berhasil menakluk kan senior Bernama Ali.? Watak Ali yang dingin dan juga sedikit jail dan kadang berubah, semakin membuat Shila bingung, apakah usahanya untuk menaklukkan Ali sia-sia atau berjalan lancar.? Suatu ketika Shila sangat galau akan perlakuan yang aneh di tunjukkan Ali padanya, memberi perhatian dengan kata-kata yang menusuk hingga ke ulu hati, tapi terkesan sangat manis. Apakah Ali juga menyimpan perasaan pada Shila.? Bagaimana kah dengan akhirnya.?? Akan kah mereka bersama.??

等哈我的

Fortune Telling, a mysterious technique, can also be said dangerous because it can change the catastrophe and make it auspicious… Teacher: Don’t give me these useless papers to me, have you finished answering your test paper? Lin Qingyin took out a tortoiseshell: Teacher, can I use divination to get the answer? Lin Qingyin, the master of fortune-telling, didn’t succeed in the Thunder Tribulation when she tried to ascend. When she woke up again, she became a high school student. Lin Qingyin, who was not afraid of Thunder Tribulation, looked at the thick test paper in front of her and shivered. Only a thousand years had passed, how could the world become so scary!

Wonderer

The mystery of a dead body

Wilson, an architect, discovers a dead body wearing nothing but just a pair of an antique pair of glasses, the kinds having no ear pieces for support. Lord Edward Cunnings, who is a highly respected man has lately taken up investigation as his favourite hobby. He takes up this case, and is determined to solve this mystery, privately. The official investigation of the case is being leaded by Inspector Charles, who believes the man could be the famous financier Sir Smith Lee, who had disappeared under mysterious circumstances the night before.

我在等你抬头

曾经她以为他们之间隔着千山万水，她以为一旦毕业，他们就再也不会相遇了……可她万万没想到，当她踏近高中教室的时候，抬头第一眼，就看到了那个人…… 纵有千山万水，我也愿跋山涉水，为你而来。 纵使天各一方，我也要寻访世界，只为见你。 辗转多年，喜欢未曾磨灭，他们，又能否在一起？

My Hero: An Infamous Tale

Kiyoko was born into a wealthy family who had ties to the creation of hero society, however due to circumstances unknown to our young hero he has been placed in the center of an amazing story.

The mystery girl.

what happens when yui doesn't come alone but forgets about the other girl she came with? What chaos will happen when she realises and the girl comes back. What is the girl yui came with?

Free Fire game

Very nice

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Little Nightmares

Monsters have fears too

monster are coming

I am a professional writer i am very good at vocabulary and grammar

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Moon lovers

"Ouchh!" I winced in pain, struggling to get back on my feet. He stared at me in a ridiculous way before grabbing me by the neck. "Your scent, you're the one,"he claimed while pushing away my head angrily. My body shrank in fear and my legs trembling from anxiety. "Why do you always say that. I don't know you. Leave me alone!" Looking at him, his face seemed pale,young and a bit old at the same time. He moved closer to me with the speed of bolt, which no normal human possesses. "That's what you think." He touched my face admiring it while I turned my face away in disgust. His dilated eyes rolled,turning red while his teeth clenched out and gradually moved his mouth towards my neck.

This love

Keira dan Reyhan bersahabat sejak lama Bisa di bilang mereka friendzone Karna Keira menyukai Reyhan. Akan tetapi Reyhan tidak menyadari perasaan nya. Lantaran wanita yang berasal dari masa lalunya kembali lagi. Reyhan selalu marah melihat Keira bersama yang lain tapi di sisi lain Reyhan mementingkan Aurel. Akankah Keira bertahan dengan Reyhan. Atau memilih seseorang yang selama ini selalu peduli padanya.?

Lazy Guy With Dimensional Group Chat

He is Lazy so that he wished that everyday is always uneventful and he always wanted to sleep, but what happens when he received a chat group where all other entities joined in? "God, Do you Bleed?" ============================ Don't expect too much from the story Cover is not mine, only took it from google. I usually update 2 chaps a day, depending if I'm not lazy XD

Era Of Transdon

Bash, a fourteen year old high school kid was living a regular African life until one day when everything changed. He got abducted into a world where only powerful gyptians could survive. These gyptians are those people who possess unimaginable power to do things like toppling mountains, destroying planets,cleaving through space time and even have the ability to live forever. In other to survive this new environment and find his way back home, bash had to face adversary after adversary and undergo untoled hardship. Untill bash became the ruler of all. the cover art doesn't belong to me, i xould not find the owner

The Warrior's Journey

Fifteen-year-old Riba Cecil is a young warrior in training. When in a medieval world where people are born with magical abilities, who wouldn't want to use them for good? Young kids are given the opportunity to train and learn what it takes to become a warrior in special institutions. Riba must overcome the trials at his warrior school, as well as encounter a great evil that slowly comes into play... I sincerely hope you readers will give this narrative of mine a chance. You won't regret it if you do. I can assure you that it will speed up and interest you. At least, I hope it does. Thank you. - Humbly, Apocalyptic.

The cold hearted CEO finally falls in love with a strange girl

System: Ruining Everything

One day, Ilma found herself to be stuck in the war between three races. When everything went according to the general's plan, she got betrayed and thrown away.

THE THREE SOULS CH:2

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Survival System in Movies

A system is only capable of saving its host and its host having to deal with his conscience and self-perseverance.

魔神大明

这是大明，却不在地球，还有位只手灭国的超凡女皇。 这是蒸汽世界，火车飞机电视电话都有，却处处潜藏混沌恶魔，人心与魔心永恒争斗。 这里对穿越者恶意满满，改天换地是不可能的，两辈子都不可能，只有努力抱大腿才能活下去这样子。 怂救非、苟长命，稳健才是最强音，高德立誓要在这草蛋的世界挣到退休金。

The Rise Of The Mafia

回到明朝当学霸

一个悲催的网络作家，失足落山，穿越大明朝，开始了逆袭的人生...... “虚拟商城系统，天字号95741，小呆为您服务！” “小呆，我需要航空母舰，我要统治大海，做那至高无上的海上霸主......” “对不起，您的等级太低，暂不支持这项服务！” “那我需要m416，我需要98k，我需要统治大明朝，我要为所欲为......” “对不起，您的等级太低，暂不支持这项服务！” “那我......我......你直说，你有啥？” “宿主可以选择经史子集、琴棋书画、歌舞小说、土豆辣椒........” “小呆，你出来，咱俩好好聊聊！” “对不起，丑拒！” “......” 山盟扣扣群：640299482

Be Mine forever

In the end, it's only us against the world, our family and our religion, but I know we will pull through because our love is stronger than romeo and juliet.

我只有无限的体质了

{新书出来聊：《从吃饱开始签到》，没有多少存稿，但是确实有点，真的只是一点点，五更就没了} 林业出生紫气三万里，异象无双，开局就是圣地圣子 身为圣子的林业天赋竟然是传说中毕废品更废的“超废品” 这一切就是一个系统干的，无限体质系统 ‘系统你这是再坑爹呀，我本天道体质，有大帝资质，你偏把我给弄废了，你不是人!’ 检测到宿主的不满，给予先天圣胎体，混沌体，三千世界体，仙王体，神王体......’ （新书《从吃饱开始签到》求支持，求收藏呀）

The shadow of dark moon

A nameless child is sold to an enemy nation for human experimentation. Found to be useless in their experiments, he is given to a squad in their army as a child solider. A squad notorious for giving their child soldiers difficult and dangerous tasks which result in high mortality rates. This follows the story of a nameless boy, who with the help of a mysterious black shadow, will do anything to survive. Even kill.

Demon Lord Teleported From Another World

[Don't expect MWUAH kind of writing(as in good quality) I do this as a side hobby when bored and do it when I can. I might release a couple a day, I might do one everyday. I just do the bare minimum needed to make things make sense. I have written other works(although one more than the other to be honest) and this is just another one that pops in my head recently. To the synopsis!] Daniel Wu is a 16 year old student at Coridale High School and was stricken with Kaden's Degenerative Disease. A Disease which appeared relatively 30 years ago, and since then has no cure. It causes a specific part of the human body to degenerate and rot away over time varying from years, to months, to days. As a result of this uncurable disease, many of those who are stricken with it get posterized by their peers. Called "Kadies" named after the first case Kaden Ross. There is no indication of whether it is hereditary, as it is still new Could it be the result of a weapon, or old disease that had been dormant. But it didn't matter where it came from, since being stricken at age 13, he has endured 3 years of mistreatment and discrimination by former friends and commoners. He with only a short time left of his life, has given up on hoping for a future. His father, a brilliant man, is busy with another project to focus on finding a cure, and him, slowly loosing his mind decides to volunteer for Project Protokin, a project with the intention of developing teleportation. As if he dies in the testing, so be it, if he lives, then he contributed to the future of technology. The project in hopes of cutting the cost of time and even resources needed for transporting goods across the world. However, a incident occurs, and now Daniel is unsure where he has been teleported. Also has an AI in his head. She will never shut up. Character in the cover is Kuklo from Attack on Titan Before the Fall. Basically the first Eren Yeager. I only recently re-read the manga(should be adapted into a anime in my opinion *cough*) and decided to use his face as the character.

DREAMS : Come True?

“Aku ingin sekali membahagiakan kedua orangtuaku dengan peluh ku sendiri. Tapi hal tersebut tentunya tidak mudah, bagaikan mengejar bintang yang sangat mustahil untuk digapai. Zaman sudah berubah. Mencari pekerjaan pun sangat sulit, apalagi dengan aku yang hanya lulusan SMP. Persentase orang yang mengganggur semakin meningkat setiap tahunnya, digantikan dengan teknologi Artificial Intelligence. Tuhan.. Apakah aku bisa?” Mengisahkan seorang anak lelaki bernama Rui Seis berumur 15 Tahun. Dia terpaksa untuk meninggalkan pendidikannya karena sedang terjadi krisis ekonomi di keluarganya. Dapat dibilang ekonomi keluarganya termasuk menengah ke bawah, serba kesulitan dalam hal ekonomi. Keluarganya sangat bergantung kepada Sang Ayah. Beberapa tahun berlalu, kondisi Keluarga Rui semakin dilema. Ayahnya mulai mengidap penyakit Alzheimer dan kanker otak, membuat kondisi ekonomi keluarga Rui semakin lama, semakin terpuruk. Tekad Rui semakin menggelora hebat untuk menggantikan posisi Sang Ayah. Dia sangat ingin untuk menafkahi keluarganya. Menyembuhkan Ayahnya dari sakit yang di derita, juga membantu Sang Ibu dan adiknya yang masih sangat kecil untuk bisa ber sekolah. Menangis, Kesakitan, Marah, Depresi. Banyak perasaan yang bergaduh di lubuk terdalam hati Rui. Anak yang malang.. Apakah dia bisa?