keraunoLv11mth

2024-09-21 21:38

It's neither good or bad, there are spelling and grammatical mistakes here and there but nothing immersion breaking and its understandable for a novice author to make such mistake. i think its still early for me to criticize the story but i find it kinda bland but at the same time i see huge room for improvement it reminds me of "moshoku tensei" a bit. the character design is pretty underwhelming to be honest, i can't imagine the characters at all due to lack of description, my advice and solution for this is to actually take time in the earlier chapters to actually describe how characters look like, for example: "the mother had golden hair so silky and smooth it sways at the weakest breeze" or "the father looked like a seasoned veteran who fought in countless wars and defeated countless enemies" (im not an author so this nor an avid novel reader so this is what i consider good discerptions). as for the world background its nothing ground breaking, it's the usual magic and swords setting but that doesn't mean at all that it's bad the author can easily originally build the rest of the world without the need to use cliches, my solution for this is actually the same as the previous point which is to take time to give the reader bits and pieces of the world in the earlier chapters, and to be original is definitely a key factor to make a good story. i give it a 3/5 with huge room for improvement

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