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Anakin_Lost
Anakin_LostLv142mth
2024-08-15 00:44

i started off loving this novel. it's a decent spin on a harem novel where the MC starts OP and navigates his way through Xanxia. The grammar is the Achilles heel for this novel as with most webnovels. I read through the first 50 chapters and while i liked what each character brought to the story, the grammar derails the build up of scenes while you mentally replace what the word should have been. having said that, author you have an Amazon worthy book if you can find a decent editor.

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GodOfLust
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Thanks for reading and giving the review. As for the grammar part, I've actually just bought grammarly premium and will edit all chapters of the novel. Hope that helps.

Anakin_Lost
Anakin_LostLv14

I honestly love that for you, let me know when the edits come through because world building and character design are all 5 stars

GodOfLust:Thanks for reading and giving the review. As for the grammar part, I've actually just bought grammarly premium and will edit all chapters of the novel. Hope that helps.
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GodOfLust
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So, I'm writing this review after writing around 80 chapters. I'll make a few things clear and then you can ask your question in comment section. MC will be like a normal human and not some egoistic edgy mc so you can drop if you want that. Like kills everything he finds, takes any women just because she's hot and like that. You won't that in this novel. About the misunderstanding part. It's actually a small part of plot and not something major like mc is completely unaware of what his disciples doing and all. Now his women. So, he will take every women in his harem whom he sees have a good character, even if he doesn't love her, yet. After all, love can be bloomed later and character is the most important. He will kill man and women, all, for his sect and disciples. But there won't be situation where he kills only make disciples of a sect and takes all female. No, because Mc wants to build a family in his sect. Now, there will be yu.ri in the harem. What means that here? It doesn't mean romantic relationship between female leads but sexual interaction while MC is present and they're doing the deed. It's hot for me so I'm writing that. Now, will all of women be virgins? No. Most will but you have to understand that mc will take his women based on character so that's not a requirement tbh. However, he wouldn't take someone who's like Aphrodite and well you know what I mean. He'll take married women due to many reasons and honestly, that's okay since the character of the women would be good. (Sleeping around obviously isn't lol) Hehe, well this is mostly for a situation where mc will have mother daughter pair and I ain't writing that mother is virgin despite being a mother. It's completely illogical. So these are the points I wanted to make and if you feel like you don't like these, then please drop the novel. This isn't for you.

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