Review Detail of InLoveWithTheCold in I'm an Internet Cafe Owner?

I didn't want to do that, but I can't help but give 2 stars for this, for the simple fact that the ff is practically hostile to the reader, it's almost like reading an mtl, I would like to read a revised version of this, (note: the name of the mc It's Chinese, and the interactions and information are thrown in an unnatural way, just waiting for readers to accept it)