Review Detail of Typicalbugbear in The Chronicles of Eldoria: The Lost Kingdom

AUTHOR REVIEW HERE! So this is my own review and I would like to announce some things! ...This is a new story I wanted to seriosly upload. Do tell me if u have any suggestion or query. I am open to any criticism and would like it if you can tell me some ups and downs of the story which you might think to be detrimental to the development of this novella.