Review Detail of Potato_Coding in DxD: Arisen One
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Frankly speaking it was boring. Idk if I wasted my time reading the 12 chapters released so far but at the moment it surely feels like I did. Writing Quality(4/5): I have a lot of complaints. But that's considering it is supposed to be a fanfic. When talking about an Original piece it's quite decent. Good grammar and a pretty tame vocabulary palette that doesn't overwhelm readers. And thankfully no AI generated jargon and flowery words. Story development (2/5): Because I don't feel like anything developed at all in the 12 chapters I read so far. I honestly see anything that I could classify as "development". Given the background of the MC the author tried to paint, his actual performance has been a let down. Still I quite like the idea of exploring the supernatural more. So there's that. Character design(3/5): Once again it's bad. But I'll keep a neutral view towards it for now. My first complaint would be that the MC is too weak. Then some weak MC lover would judge me and my entire family to the kingdom come because apparently strong MCs ruin every story. Although me wanting a strong MC comes purely from the expectations set by the synopsis and the prologue introduction chapter of the MC (and now he can't really live up to that expectation, which is disappointing). But weak MC lovers won't understand. Updating Stability(5/5): Because it doesn't really matter to me. Idk the author's schedule, since I binge read it, but so long the chapters are worth the wait, who cares if it takes a day more or 2. World background(4/5): As mentioned earlier in the Story development phase, I quite like the idea of the author expanding the supernatural side of the world. Exploring more and more. So, kudos. Overall(3.6/5): Once again the readability is good but overall it was boring for me. It could definitely change in the future as there's been only 12 chapters so far and the foundation hasn't been set yet. I'll probably revisit this after a month and update my review.
DxD: Arisen One
Casual11
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Thank you for taking your time to write this review. About story development- Your complaint is valid, which is why I will try to improve this point the most. I will try to introduce more characters, as well as make some interesting subplots for readers to explore. About character design and the MC. Here I can also understand your disappointment with the expectations I set up, but I also don't want to make my character become a generic overpowered MC and then supplement the story with nothing more than slice of life. Still, I do think it's my mistake for making him look so weak while I made him sound as one of the strongest, so I will also try to remedy this one. But besides that, I thank you for making a normal review that really showcases the weak points of my work. Have a great day.
You're welcome. Just so you know, you actually have a talent in this. So, don't doubt that and keep on improving. I'll wait and see how you'll maneuver the MC character design issue. Because my problem was never about power. He could've been totally powerless for all I care. My opinion is just that the character flow should be coherent. It isn't at the moment but there's still a lot to be explored, so I shall remain ever so hopeful.
Casual11:Thank you for taking your time to write this review. About story development- Your complaint is valid, which is why I will try to improve this point the most. I will try to introduce more characters, as well as make some interesting subplots for readers to explore. About character design and the MC. Here I can also understand your disappointment with the expectations I set up, but I also don't want to make my character become a generic overpowered MC and then supplement the story with nothing more than slice of life. Still, I do think it's my mistake for making him look so weak while I made him sound as one of the strongest, so I will also try to remedy this one. But besides that, I thank you for making a normal review that really showcases the weak points of my work. Have a great day.
Casual11:Thank you for taking your time to write this review. About story development- Your complaint is valid, which is why I will try to improve this point the most. I will try to introduce more characters, as well as make some interesting subplots for readers to explore. About character design and the MC. Here I can also understand your disappointment with the expectations I set up, but I also don't want to make my character become a generic overpowered MC and then supplement the story with nothing more than slice of life. Still, I do think it's my mistake for making him look so weak while I made him sound as one of the strongest, so I will also try to remedy this one. But besides that, I thank you for making a normal review that really showcases the weak points of my work. Have a great day.