Alright, first things first to make your novel more appealing to readers: work on the structure of your writing. Apologies in advance, but your writing appears a bit messy and lacks proper organization. There's no clear distinction between one dialogue and the next, and this affects the overall quality of your novel. Despite that, your story has an interesting plot, and the conflicts are well-written. However, I believe the challenging part for this novel to attract readers lies in its writing style. Still, it's intriguing so far, even though it might take a few chapters to fully engage readers 😂.
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COMMEJeweled_Rose:Thank you for the tip! I will try and fix that, I appreciate the feedback a lot!