Review Detail of HarveyBakes in Chains of Destiny

As I read the story it seems Interesting shadows,magic, etc. but somehow I notice something my advise is that don't put too much narration on the story add some conversations too make it look intense , overall the story was good the plot, and can you add something on the future that makes him revive some undead and make him its shadow allies just asking but oveall it's fine.-HarveyBakes