The story is ok , my only problem it doesn't flow as much as u what it to when I read a novel I like image I am watching the novel as a film , I imagine the interactions ,emotions , dialogue and action of the characters. Sorry but some the dialogue especially the emotional scenes , when it plays in my head it sounds a little cringe, sorry again, the story , writing etc is top tier but dialogue sounds weird to me
Kuroto_Tennouji
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COMMESo relax, I understand what you're saying. Much of this can happen because of the translation into English. Since I'm not fluent and don't know much about the language, I end up resorting to translation via GPT, which can take away some of the emotion. I'll try to improve it for the next chapters, and thank you for the review.