Review Detail of ChaosZefnir in I, Who Will Rule The World

Positive: Good pacing, good use of tone, memorable character names, alright use of sense writing. Things to improve: Spacing… it’s very important. Most readers will find this type of writing cluttered, and sometimes, it becomes a bit difficult to really understand your story’s core concepts. Characters need stable and unstable attributes, it’s only been three chapters but remember it for the future. Grammar needs a bit of work, but if you take your time and edit each chapter properly, it shouldn’t be an issue.