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Honoured_Writer
Honoured_WriterLv41yr
2023-09-03 07:51

I‘m actually really enjoying this story so far. It’s plot is interesting as well as its story development at times but one thing that really draws me in is its way with words and how it describes different events. As a author that got into writing to improve my skills Im really taking inspiration from this when it comes to my own works. My only problem with it is it’s almost overwhelming amount of metaphors and descriptions really break the immersion, cause while these descriptions really help to visualise, too much just breaks the stroy flow and gets repetitive. That along with the fact that they’re some moments that can be skipped can be frustratining

Reincarnated with JJK Powerset in Harry Potter!

InAnotherWorld
4.3
21 Chs

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InAnotherWorld
InAnotherWorldAuthor

ahhh, okay I get it. Thank you as this really helps me better my writing. A reviewer actually said the same thing so I'll try my best to fit it into the way people want the story to be told. Thank you for the review!

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Orion_Ridge
Orion_RidgeLv2

Will this have romance? If yes, then harem or single fml?

InAnotherWorld:ahhh, okay I get it. Thank you as this really helps me better my writing. A reviewer actually said the same thing so I'll try my best to fit it into the way people want the story to be told. Thank you for the review!
1yr
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BeastNaBh
BeastNaBhLv3

Yeh author-san it's like when you eat your favourite food everyday than you loose your appetite for that food the way with the words is just like that if you exaggerate everything with your wording than if would loose it's fun, and when you really want to show something breathtaking with your words to visualise than the readers won't be able to that as it looses it's fun and it also takes lots of brain power to imagine that stuff which I think 🤔 make some people loose there patience. So please think on that and please give us more chapters ☺️.

InAnotherWorld:ahhh, okay I get it. Thank you as this really helps me better my writing. A reviewer actually said the same thing so I'll try my best to fit it into the way people want the story to be told. Thank you for the review!
1yr
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Wesley_Hylry
Wesley_HylryLv14

is harem? 😊

InAnotherWorld:ahhh, okay I get it. Thank you as this really helps me better my writing. A reviewer actually said the same thing so I'll try my best to fit it into the way people want the story to be told. Thank you for the review!
1yr
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JustSomeRandomNPC
JustSomeRandomNPCLv4

please don't go into harem route...

1yr
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Honoured_Writer
Honoured_WriterLv4

Wesley_Hylry:is harem? 😊
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1yr
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Azathoth2
Azathoth2Lv4

So is this a harem or not ??

Honoured_Writer:
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Azathoth2
Azathoth2Lv4

lol 😆😆

Honoured_Writer:
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Honoured_Writer
Honoured_WriterLv4

Author still hasn’t decided

Azathoth2:So is this a harem or not ??
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Hugo_Adam
Hugo_AdamLv4

Hopefully it won't be harem 👏🏻

Honoured_Writer:Author still hasn’t decided
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okay I'll admit this is actually a pretty good fic I don't normally do reviews so I'll just say it's worth the read and who he is and who he interacts with he ain't no psycho MC actually got some brains but it's not like super smart and he's also not a psycho so that's a plus

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