Review Detail of GinMonroe in Dragon King Order

first things first, you don't need to say Chens whole name every time. We know he is Chen Peng. 2nd, you you don't need to put ! after a sentence, just describe everything so we can feel how Chen feels or feel how the narrator is telling the story. space out your paragraphs so we know you're moving on to a different scene, like when you were talking about Chen and this old man in prison, then you did a flash back. those paragraphs should be spaced apart, and if you're doing a flashback, it should start like this... Flashbackthen this is where you show us the flashback. story is good but can be better.