For the blurb - you can make it an open question like. It would make the blurb sounds more interesting. Ummi contended herself with admiring him from a distance until... > Until she wasn't, until she didn't or something happened and pull them together etc. Overall I do quite enjoyed it, there are areas to be improved but it's not a big of a deal, the story itself was good. Great job author!
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