Review Detail of Cabaye in Bleach: Clouds are Nigh

Hah! Author here :) This is just for some fun, nothing serious. Bleach is my favorite series, so I'll try not to bastardize the story if I end up writing more chapters for it. If you somehow end up enjoying it, please let me know! If you don't, that's fine. I'd still love to know what you don't like about it. Would really appreciate any feedback :)