honestly this story is simply amazing and very intriguing it's written quiet well with great information but try to put the personal dialogue inclosed (........) so we know it's not part of a conversation but instead just someone's thought also if you can, maybe you can do a prologue about each nation, their rulers and any other valuable information, it's a little hard for people like me to remember names especially when you're going from one narration to another but all in all it's really super good I love đâ€ïž
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