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GeneralDeFartos_L
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It's a great story. Nice characters and competent MC. Story progression is neat, nothing bad sticks out, it's all smooth and nothing illogical. --- The only bad thing I can say here: - Many wives = not good I don't mind if he's a playboy that flirts and does the deed and then dips and disappears. The problem is when he likes someone, we get a lot of details during his conquest to conquer her and how he wifes her up. But after that we readers forget her cuz she's now in his collection, so why go in depth into her character? That's a problem. It'll become more of a problem the more wives he gets, it's just adding wives to his collection and adding baggage on top of his problems. It wouldn't have been a problem if he actually makes them his wife but leaves them in their world. It wouldn't be a problem if MC was just trashy and he just uses them then forgets them without making them wives. It becomes a problem when he's constantly trying to juggle between them when they're with him, we don't see their personalities and don't go in depth of their psyche, they just become a chore for the MC at that point. As a reader, I'm tired just reading about he plans his dates with each one. ----- Now, where my gripe lies: Why the heck is he capturing anyone and everyone and turning them into a wife? He can conquer anyone but no need to turn her into a wife! What's the point of layla? She has absolutely nothing to do with him, so why take her along? She's useless and doesn't add anything to the story. Even Sophie is too much, he just had a slight little connection with her, no feelings and certainly no purpose for MC to take care and wife her up. At this point it just feels like a collect em all type of story in terms of harem. The same type of problem every harem story has. Authors don't focus of the story and feelings behind characters. They focus on collecting as many girls for MC as possible within the confines of the story. I see this story heading in a similar direction. If the harem gets too much, even the author wouldn't know how to deal with it. My favorite characters in this story are: MC Anna Emily (cute lil kid) Favorite wives: Alice Sasha All others are just extra with no real need to add them in the story, it would've been fine if they were in their own world.

Erotic Adventures in the Omniverse: Vampire Lord got too many wives

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GeneralDeFartos_L
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I'd like to add that I'm in love with the story. The pacing is nicely done. The progression of the story is natural. The story hooks and you just have to read it. Added to my favorites. Still, I can see that the many wives at the same time is gonna be a problem. And I can't stomach MC dragging every girl along with him (Sophie and Layla). Especially Layla! Ugh Author, you have to kill her off or something. No one will drop a single tear. Let MC use her in a plan and she somehow gets killed which drives MC mad with rage and he solves the problem but she's gone now.