Review Detail of de_writer in White Roses and Red Blood

While this story is quite enjoyable, I feel there is some work needed before it can be considered a masterpiece. In terms of plot and characters, the story is perfect, the author able to show the characters personalities well as well as write engaging dialogue. The plot is also quite interesting and I say this as a fan of historical romance stories. My problem with the story comes in the form of grammar (I might be nitpicking here). There are a few sentences that seem to go on and on, without really having an exact subject. Not sure if that makes sense? There is also a lot of telling in this story which I feel messes up the writing style a little. I feel a lot of descriptions and information could be 'shown' instead, making for easy reading. Anyway, you've done a great job author, one or two problems here and there, but otherwise keep it up and keep improving.