Review Detail of PyroSaiyan in Primordial Files: The Gamer

Here's an obligatory review, since I'm the author and all that jazz. Simply put, this story is one I've wanted to rewrite for a while, and I've finally gotten around to it. It won't be perfect, and it certainly won't be for everyone. I have the goal to focus more on a mystery, detective story than an OP, weak-to-strong story. If you enjoy mysteries, I hope this will be more up your alley. Regardless, I appreciate everyone who gives this story a try. Even if you didn't like it, I'd really appreciate some legitimate criticism for it. Not just, "I don't like this," but actual reasons for those feelings. Whether that's character actions, how the main character reacts, abilities, or the general writing style. I'd appreciate it no matter what, as proper criticism will allow me to become a better writer overall. Regardless of that all, I hope you enjoy the story. Thanks for reading.