Review Detail of Josh_Richie in MCU: The Heavenly Yaksha (A Non-Harem FanFic)
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I think the author has a thing for combined world systems. I quite enjoyed the other fanfic about the sorcerer supreme in the DXD world but as soon as he decided it was needed to absorb the Will of Joy Boy from Luffy and kill IM, I quit the book. About this FF, I have to say, I was expecting something different but this is just *sigh*. I don't know if you understand the one piece world well enough but when it comes to the three Haki, there is a need for ones will, instinct and body to surpass the normal human category before they can awaken conqueror, observation and armament Haki respectively. Five years can't possibly do that, but hey, this is a FF so all is well, but the issue arises when the MC struggles to defeat some random normal human, how preposterous is that? Even some casual human from the one piece world can literally Strong arm some powered people in the Marvel Universe. Keyword:Some. Another annoying thing is the way you portray Matilda or whatever her name is to be eleven and get after your Timeskip you created a scene where MC beats up some 10-11 gear old "normal humans" for bullying her and yet say they were probably in the the basketball team. There's a lot I have to say but this is my honest opinion about it. You do you. as an author you shouldn't listen to every negative comments but you should atleast see what I'm trying to say.
MCU: The Heavenly Yaksha (A Non-Harem FanFic)
SlimeSage
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Thank you for your review but please let me clear some things up. About his fight with the Winter Soldier, he didn't lost, first, he's holding back because he wanted to increase his experience in fighting a very skilled and experienced assassin and second, you must be thinking he lost but he actually didn't, the reason why he looks like he lost was because of lack of experience in fighting, yes he's also skilled and his physical aspects is higher than The Winter Soldier but he's fighting someone who has around 50-60 experience of combat and just to remind you again, he's holding some of his strength back because he wanted to up his combat experience. As for the 'kids' that he beat up, they're not kids, they're around 16-18 because Matilda is at high school despite being an 11 years old. I already explained why she's at high school, but I'll explain it again, she's super smart for her age and she learns nothing in Elementary, so with the help of Coulson, she managed to advance to High School just so she could squeeze more knowledge. Anyways, I'm not trying to fight or something, I just want to clear things up. Thanks for the review once again!
SlimeSage:Thank you for your review but please let me clear some things up. About his fight with the Winter Soldier, he didn't lost, first, he's holding back because he wanted to increase his experience in fighting a very skilled and experienced assassin and second, you must be thinking he lost but he actually didn't, the reason why he looks like he lost was because of lack of experience in fighting, yes he's also skilled and his physical aspects is higher than The Winter Soldier but he's fighting someone who has around 50-60 experience of combat and just to remind you again, he's holding some of his strength back because he wanted to up his combat experience. As for the 'kids' that he beat up, they're not kids, they're around 16-18 because Matilda is at high school despite being an 11 years old. I already explained why she's at high school, but I'll explain it again, she's super smart for her age and she learns nothing in Elementary, so with the help of Coulson, she managed to advance to High School just so she could squeeze more knowledge. Anyways, I'm not trying to fight or something, I just want to clear things up. Thanks for the review once again!
SlimeSage:Thank you for your review but please let me clear some things up. About his fight with the Winter Soldier, he didn't lost, first, he's holding back because he wanted to increase his experience in fighting a very skilled and experienced assassin and second, you must be thinking he lost but he actually didn't, the reason why he looks like he lost was because of lack of experience in fighting, yes he's also skilled and his physical aspects is higher than The Winter Soldier but he's fighting someone who has around 50-60 experience of combat and just to remind you again, he's holding some of his strength back because he wanted to up his combat experience. As for the 'kids' that he beat up, they're not kids, they're around 16-18 because Matilda is at high school despite being an 11 years old. I already explained why she's at high school, but I'll explain it again, she's super smart for her age and she learns nothing in Elementary, so with the help of Coulson, she managed to advance to High School just so she could squeeze more knowledge. Anyways, I'm not trying to fight or something, I just want to clear things up. Thanks for the review once again!