Review Detail of DaYelus in Origin Soul Master

Hi everyone! This is my second story, and after a year of not uploading anything, have decided to upload another novel. An overall better novel than my previous work! I want to remind everyone that I am still a novice, so any advice is greatly appreciated, and if you have any interesting ideas I find appropriate, I may even include them in the story! I hope you all like it! If you do, recommend it to others, that way my work can reach more and more people.