Although I wouldn't say it was the finest novel I've ever read, it was still rather good considering it was your first. The noises were the only thing that bothered me; yes, I realize that you repeated them to let the reader comprehend that they were sounds. I thought some of the laughter was inappropriate, though it may have just been "ha ha" or "haha." Some noises also were. The ticks rather than repeat could of be "the tick repeated over and over again." rathe than tick tick tick tick.
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