Your story intrigued me, it has a good beginning, the hero may seem naive at first, but soon he will know pain and despair, turning into someone more mature (I hope not into the lord of the edge), and also, although there is not much plot yet, and it is not too complicated, it catches, and it is easy to read, So I'm staying.
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COMMEIll probably get back to it at some point. The MC is just unlikable for me. The prologue was also bad and went on for too long. Even the first few bleach chapters dont seem interesting. Especially cause i read the chapter as saying the MC split his soul and sent it to the Bleach world to play Hollow which i hate the idea. I hate split soul tropes. I could have read it wrong though.
Sphire1707:haha... I wish you would.
well... I can spoil it by tell in you that ended with them becoming one again after a few chapters and then it get's pretty spicy from then on. still wish you'd read it...
Crimson_King:Ill probably get back to it at some point. The MC is just unlikable for me. The prologue was also bad and went on for too long. Even the first few bleach chapters dont seem interesting. Especially cause i read the chapter as saying the MC split his soul and sent it to the Bleach world to play Hollow which i hate the idea. I hate split soul tropes. I could have read it wrong though.
So he really split his soul? Thats sucks. I dont trust your “a few chapters” a few for me would be less then five but usually when authors say a few they mean a whole Arc or Volume. If he merges back together in 5 or less chapters ill pick it back up immediately. If not I’ll wait till i get the motivation to put my self through the hassle again.
Sphire1707:well... I can spoil it by tell in you that ended with them becoming one again after a few chapters and then it get's pretty spicy from then on. still wish you'd read it...image
Welp... I hope you get the motivation back pretty soon as it's about 18 chapters.
Crimson_King:So he really split his soul? Thats sucks. I dont trust your “a few chapters” a few for me would be less then five but usually when authors say a few they mean a whole Arc or Volume. If he merges back together in 5 or less chapters ill pick it back up immediately. If not I’ll wait till i get the motivation to put my self through the hassle again.
you forgot that the accumulated pain of the 5000 years of torture made him almost immobile... and him exploding his life energy to escape partly damaged his soul... so he's using the clone to power up his soul so he can do the reincarnation to repair himself. Like I already said, I was still new to this writing thing... I still am but i made the mistake of over elongating the back story then. I learned from that mistake and I do my best to write better now and learn more to improve my writing skills
Well hopefully if yoy ever make a nee fanfic we never go through such a long intro again. 3 chapters is more than enough
Sphire1707:you forgot that the accumulated pain of the 5000 years of torture made him almost immobile... and him exploding his life energy to escape partly damaged his soul... so he's using the clone to power up his soul so he can do the reincarnation to repair himself. Like I already said, I was still new to this writing thing... I still am but i made the mistake of over elongating the back story then. I learned from that mistake and I do my best to write better now and learn more to improve my writing skills
Just add Harem or no harem tag
Sphire1707:you forgot that the accumulated pain of the 5000 years of torture made him almost immobile... and him exploding his life energy to escape partly damaged his soul... so he's using the clone to power up his soul so he can do the reincarnation to repair himself. Like I already said, I was still new to this writing thing... I still am but i made the mistake of over elongating the back story then. I learned from that mistake and I do my best to write better now and learn more to improve my writing skills