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Review Detail of Zendaran in (Concept Draft) In The Space Exploration Era, I Am The Only Mage

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Zendaran
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Interesting first few chapters. I could immgine myself reading this Story for a long time, as long as the style and flow doesn’t change too much. A few tings I would like to see more of, more detailed descriptions of the environment , be descriptive of emotion and thought process, having the beasts/mounsters that the Protagonist encounters be described in more detail. The weird thing is that a person could be so relaxed after seeing coworkers die then crash landing on a alien planet that is known to be extremely deadly ,then barely surviving a monster encounter, being a lot more paranoid of every new alien thing would be more believable. Interesting Setting ,would like to see more of everything.

(Concept Draft) In The Space Exploration Era, I Am The Only Mage

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Thanks for the input! I appreciate the feed back, and plan on incorporating some of the advice given!