A nice attempt, the first time tge author talked about Jojo being in Beck’s body, that was something new but sadly the physical Beck had died! I think you can try shortening your lobg paragraphs into shprter paragraphs and also be a tipsy bit more descriptive! Anyways, good work author and keep working hard! [img=recommend]
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