It's a fairly short experience, but I can tell that you have a lot of passion for the source material. The main thing that needs to be improved are your set pieces. The story is progressing but there's not many memorable moments to remember as they pass by too quickly. Otherwise, I hope you continue to write this story, as it is a niche that not many others will satisfy.
Queen_Endi
Liked it!
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