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JustSomeAirBison
JustSomeAirBisonLv22yr
2022-06-26 11:42

It's okay so far but a lot of cliche are used in the beginning and also uses common tropes such a evil dumbledore but I think you can make it work since the MC will be a lot more powerful and he needs powerful villains to not make the story boring.

Master of Death: Harry Potter

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Gh0st00
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well you're getting a one-star review for just a simple fact you lie about 4 chapters a week N20 captors a month which is a lie cuz you ain't posted nothing except for the last chapter in 4 months

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Dreamer_1297
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really misleading synopsis. no he did not get his wishes. it was a loli weak god tricked to give him very weak wishes by his step brother who is a god and a lot more powerful than her. moreover a chunk of his soul was cut while he was sent to reincarnate. it left a really bad taste in my mouth. I was gonna curse author for ruining my mood but I thought he is not worth it.

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Taragorm
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I felt like I just try to eat something nasty when I read the first few chapters I had to spit it out my mouth in reflex and scream it's raw. Needs rewrite good idea lsd trip of an execution. Meanness out of my system love the idea just too confusing trying to get my head around the story too much work for my tiny brain just wanted to instant drop. Just as I got my head around bad start wish and the champion of the scions of death thing. I get evil sibling soul split attack potter manor and a twin so vastly different from source feels too much too fast. probably better if you did a novel instead of fanfic remove the Harry potter out of it or put more of the original back in. I'm writing this long review because I see something here just don't know what good novel idea or a good fanfic currently feels like an scp memitic hazard

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Tevin_Persinger
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I feel like your trying to do way to much. So many schemes within schemes do were stuck reading more about the schemes than we are the actual characters. It gets annoying real quick. There are more words about the schemes than there are about the mc. I want to read a novel, not schemeception.

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