Review Detail of Llama_92 in Swordancia

I'll start by complimenting the idea, it's interesting in and of itself but that is it. The writing from the onset doesn't flow, we don't know anything about the setting we are thrust in, and no good character background. The story switches POVs often with no warning, literally the next sentence will be involving 2 characters in a completely different location and you figure it out a paragraph or two later which is confusing and a put-off. Not to mention basic he/her grammatical errors and misspelling have me dropping at ch 44. Also, what is the overarching plot here? What is his goal besides rescuing his kidnapped mom, I mean that can't be all there is to this right? Again great idea, bad execution.