Review Detail of Kitsune_Raijin in Naruto: The Wandering Blacksmith
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It's really bad, first he can't even write kunai, it's always Kuni, that really drove me crazy xD, second the plot is non-existent and full of holes, and the personality of the MC doesn't make sense. The general concept of the novel is good, but the execution is nefarious, the only thing that can save this is a rewrite, not before some time to work more in the plot, the personality of the MC, the grammar... basically everything
Naruto: The Wandering Blacksmith
what_if_3574
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Can you give me examples? I take any criticism seriously, so please give me examples of the plot holes or why Ryu's personally is trash in your opinion. If I see you have a point I'll edit the fan-fuc like how I did with other criticisms. As for the grammar issue you mentioned, I'll take it to heart.
what_if_3574:Can you give me examples? I take any criticism seriously, so please give me examples of the plot holes or why Ryu's personally is trash in your opinion. If I see you have a point I'll edit the fan-fuc like how I did with other criticisms. As for the grammar issue you mentioned, I'll take it to heart.
