Review Detail of yohananmikhael in Dance Of The Elite

I really don't know how the story will go as it was already confusing at the first chapter. I viewed this for collecting material to improve my writing' BUt since I can feel the color of the story, I'll advice you something. Improve your writing in a bit understandable manner. Add more details not just words like, sad, mad, angry or something. And explain what are the sorroundings and what is the expression of the MC in every situation. Read other novels as for you not to get ignorant. It's also a trait a creator should have. When it comes to character development, make it more convincing. After all the thing that you lacks is material collecting. What I mean is there is no unique writing style and plot, there is always inspiration in every creation. Well, it's only my opinion, you can contradict that phrase. But really, I would love to see your progress in the future but with the current condition of this story, I have to drop it. That's all. Keep on writing!