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It has been a while since I last read a zombie apocalypse novel. You have a unique story with you, my friend, and I hope you can continue writing. The prologue is really engaging! I love zombies, mate! So, 4.5/5 stars! The .5 is the other grammatical errors and "Telling". There are some words/sentences that need commas, so you better watch out for that when you edit the chapters. Besides that, the "Show, not tell." This technique is a bit tricky, but once you get the hang of it, your story will bloom everywhere in no time!

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WHEN DEATH SKIPPED A SOUL : LIFELESS

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THANK U VERY MUCH ༎ຶ‿༎ຶ I've been struggling with my grammar but you made my day and I promise to improve thank you again(ᗒᗩᗕ)