Review Detail of Shuyuka in My Better Half (she's mine)

I had a lot of apprehension to reading this seeing as mature romance isn't my cup of tea, but this story has a lot of potential. There's a lot of dialogue so beware of that and it can come off as too much in the wrong places if that makes sense. In the future I hope the author experiments with more prose as well as more calculated and meaningful dialogue to facilitate the story being told and it's flow