Review Detail of CalypsoDay in King of the east universe

The story has a good start. You do have to work a bit more on your writing skills. I would've liked if the chapters were a bit longer, but that's not something to seriously worry about. Some paragraphs don't start with capital letters, and in my opinion, you should correct that. There are also a few grammatical errors, though nothing serious. Pay a bit more attention and your writing will definitely improve. Keep it up!