Review Detail of BleakSky in Reincarnation as a Peerless Martial God / Cultivator with Sharingan!
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Hey Author, Great stuff writing a PMG fanfic! Nice long chaps, update is okay... BUT! The dialouge, the way its structured. example: (This is apart of it lol the dash) - talking...... “ lin feng said determinedly or something - “talking again.....!? Lin feng said and then carry on more words... “wordsssssss” (used it correctly after doing this mess of a dialouge... this is how author writes it continuously “.....!? Some reason this means you dont need to put quotation mark... author..?) It should always be “ “ quotation in the beginning and at the end of speech, quotation. No dash at the beginning or ending with exclamation mark(!) or question mark(?) “Talking!” Lin Fend shouted or said determinedly. Also in chapter 16 their was a her his for lin hong when it said her sister, it should be his sister. I was confused and thought lin hong was girl, just dont make these mistakes please as I dont remember much of PMG, especially side characters. Dont wanna read and mistake for girl when the whole time they were guys or same thing in reverse ya know? Author thanks if you listened and decided to change the dialouge as its sometimes confusing. Eat well and you’ll live longer! Thank you for writing PMG fanfic and is Lin Qian in the harem, slave, maid or she courting death?
Reincarnation as a Peerless Martial God / Cultivator with Sharingan!
blazerboe2020
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BleakSky:Okay... im talking about how you write your dialouge, not english. Quotation marks at the beginning of speech and “...!?” when talking ends quotation mark at the end, simple right? instead of - “....!? he/she said. No dash (-) just quotation (“) mark to indicate the beginning of talking and when talking finish, end with another even if their are ! Or ? “Speaking!?” He/she said. Dont worry about the english, its good enough to read through compared to some others I’ve had the displeasure of discovering and some that despite the bad english was worth it. just gets confusing when you cut the dialouge after exclamation mark or question mark instead of adding the last quotation as I continue reading thinking the person speaking is still talking but isnt. This is just advice, take or not is up to you. If you feel more comfortable writing as is then feel free too do so as i’ll continue reading!
Okay... im talking about how you write your dialouge, not english. Quotation marks at the beginning of speech and “...!?” when talking ends quotation mark at the end, simple right? instead of - “....!? he/she said. No dash (-) just quotation (“) mark to indicate the beginning of talking and when talking finish, end with another even if their are ! Or ? “Speaking!?” He/she said. Dont worry about the english, its good enough to read through compared to some others I’ve had the displeasure of discovering and some that despite the bad english was worth it. just gets confusing when you cut the dialouge after exclamation mark or question mark instead of adding the last quotation as I continue reading thinking the person speaking is still talking but isnt. This is just advice, take or not is up to you. If you feel more comfortable writing as is then feel free too do so as i’ll continue reading!
blazerboe2020:I do not know English and translate everything through Google.
blazerboe2020:I understand you. This translator for some reason removes quotation marks and punctuation marks