Review Detail of Mel_Aniv in An illusion

The story was short and was completed. It was a roller coaster ride of emotions as I have read it. The fluency of the writer in English was splendid as far as I have read. Mysterious enough to get you hooked! All I can say was make the story a bit of thirty to forty chapters long to make it at least more engaging. It was the length of other short stories that were made into a movie. So all in all, a great job well done!