Review Detail of Ant_3755 in The last Daimon of Primus Planan
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You have decent grammar so that’s why you got a 4. You have good updating stability to that’s a 4. You have a ok story development, I would wish if you did more research on bears and animals that you use also more action besides him talking about breeding his army all day. I love the character design it’s great but you could give more detailed information on how they look. Lastly we don’t know much about the world at all. I hope you get more into the world soon.
The last Daimon of Primus Planan
rafa101
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Thanks for the review. I guess the real action will start off side stories detailing the effects many of the changes his experimenting and evolving creates. So if you want that exiting action it's coming chapter 9+ these first chapter are setting up many of the creatures you'll see later on. I do hope you keep reading!