The story is good, I like how the character narrates the story. The story is good, it just needs editing. Just a little advice: if you're going to use first person point of view, the story must be in present tense but if you're going to use third person point of view, the story must be in past tense. Also, the spacing and the capitalization of some words needs some editing. Lastly, the grammar needs a little editing (you can use Grammarly). Overall, the story has a good plot and the narration is good. I like it. Keep updating, Author!
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