Review Detail of Thereviewer48 in Save State

Writing Quality: 2/5 The writing is bad, maybe try grammarly.It is very dialogue heavy and written like a script. A story needs a good balance or dialogue and descriptions. Update Stability: 5/5 I put that for everyone Story Development: 3/5 It is not bad, but I wish I could enjoy it. It would be better if there was more descriptions added. Also some stuff was confusing that I had to reread to make sure I didn't miss anything. Character Design: 3/5 Your characters are not bad, but once again I wish there was more descriptions to tell me about them. Dialogue does not give the depth of a person's feelings, motives, etc. World Background: 3/5 Your story could be a gem, I enjoy what you are making and trying to do, but once again, we come back to descriptions; there needs to be some with paragraphs and not something written like a script. You are on the right road, but maybe research more on writing or get inspired by other books while also using one of the sites that help in grammar. Keep up the good work!