Review Detail of mikedanger in (being rewritten)

so far it's a nice story but not really sure about the update schedule. the way you write could be better. you could do better with the inner monologue and the pov switches. some of the inner monologues are sometimes just redundant but if done better could make it sound better. the main character has a nice development so far from what I read with the availability chapters but could have had more details. so far it's a very impressive story that could actually go somewhere if done right and if not dropped. hopefully, this story lasts