Review Detail of ToujiSouya in My dream to be The Greatest Trainer

I have major problems with this fan fiction. To start the main characters wishes make no sense and are very stupid and also very random. To add the main character feels bland and it makes the story boring to read. Also it feels like you are shoving random scenarios into this fiction like the bullying of the mom for no reason and how Cynthia acts like a complete child that doesn’t fit her character in the show. And also the ho oh part was very forced as well that it seems a 7 year old child was writing this. The start was ok but it’s just a downward slope to the point of gotten to it.The main thing holding this back is how you are showing the characters and that needs to be fixed because it’s hard to read these conversations for enjoyment which is what fan fictions are about