End of the first volume: Everything was going great untill the addition of other systems and anime, manhwas, etc.. Pro: 1. Writing is clear and understandable 2. System mechanics are very logicical and I can understand your thoughts behind it 3. Very interesting first chapter with a great hook Cons: 1. Spreads it self too far Explanation; it was going really well until you decided to add more animes/manhwas because you just kept adding them too fast and didn’t give us enough time for us to take in or enjoy them especially when you decided to randomly put in dangaropa into the picture after we’ve just see you include in record of ragnarok, iruma-kun, lookism, etc.. but, not only that you then decided to put the mc through a percarious event without any build up which again is going really fast and felt forced to me. 2. The system has too many mechanics Explanation; again like the last con your spreading yourself too much and just adding more work for yourself with the Chat system. And, I can try to guess and say that you did it so you can have more adventures for the mc but you already have soo much to work on so it feels very rushed. 3. The story feels rushed Explanation: you were doing pretty good for the first few chapters but it felt very rushed after you decided to add other animes. And, it seems like you were just adding things to make the story interesting but it just comes out as very rushed. Conclusion: Solid intro and story but please try not to spread yourself thin and rush yourself because you have potential and I don’t want to see you get burnt out on writing. Also, maybe take more time when thinking about your story and try not to worry too much about updates. Overall, I give this a 3.9/5
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