Review Detail of Awaven in King of Harem: Beautiful Ladies Everywhere

Grammar and writing quality could use improvement, main issue I see being occasional words out of order and words being excluded in the dialogue that makes the story feel clunky. WQ : 2/5 (Just work on grammar) SoU : 4/5 (Only 2 ch. out, so not really applicable) SD : 3/5 (Story feels slightly rushed? Somewhat normal pace for a novel, though I would personally prefer it turned down a notch early on) CD : 2/5 (Characters seem a little flat, but only 2 ch. in, so seems normal) WB : 2/5 (Story does not touch on world background yet, so probably N/A) I do not mean to be that guy, but this story seems very familiar. The plot in ch. 1-2 is shockingly similar to the first chapter of the (18+) Visual Novel Daughter for Dessert. The Visual Novel probably being the inspiration for the start of the story. (If you look it up you can play the first chapter for free in browser.) I do kinda feel bad for my low rating but can't really be helped since I am writing a review after reading ch. 2. My rating would probably be higher after a few more chapters so I will be keeping an eye on this story, as I am also somewhat interested in how this story will play out. I might post another review then (probably at ch. 30-50)