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I've been waiting to hear what happened to her.
hes imagining all of this like it was "Leo's choice" when Leo clearly said it was an accident and never intentional. it wouldn't be hard then for him to say he purposely stayed out of the leaderboard, but he ended up completing a massive chain quest that had been ongoing since the start and gave him massive leveling rewards at the end.
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152 MP. that call was less then 3 minutes, at 50 mp per minute
why is he not getting levels for killing the assassins? he gained levels from the first one he killed way back.
author, Leo should have around 1500 MP. you wrote him gaining +500 extra for completing his quest early.
maybe the bullet is too small to hold an enchantment?
why are there always spoilers? the constant "unknown to our idiot MC xxxxxx xxxxx xxxxxx xxxxx". there's no tension or suspense like this. he's going to a mystery x marks the spot and instead of some suspense and curiosity build up, instead we are just told outright what it is for no reason.
I'm not sure if it changes later, hopefully the author picks up on it, but some of the paragraphs are single sentences. they run on for waaaay too long without pause.
i know it was mentioned in the chapter, but the time frame for this needs some explanation if it isn't going to be just considered BS. 12 hours min game time 9 hours min working 3 hours for eating, shower, sleep?
it was less of job fairness and more of "you can't be assaulted by a supervisor for perceived average performance" where as here the supervisors can beat you to hell and back for whatever reason and you can't do anything about it or you die.
and here I thought it was cause he was getting bonus exp for being in the dungeon
or....he follows the air vent? you know, the thing that helps keep fresh air in the mine.
don't forget about how wolves don't hibernate, nor would they have the young wolves guarding adult wolves. I get making it game-like and having progression, but that doesn't mix well with a hyper realistic scenario.
taking...a nap???? one howl and every adult would be awake and after you. there has to be better reasoning than that
i only recall it saying he would be killed if he told anyone on the ship. it seems being discovered in game by NPCs holds different punishments.