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Translation, updates, character design and world background are good. I mean, its a fanfic, if these four are bad it means that the author shoved in tons of useless OC's or knew nothing about the original works the fanfic is based on. Everything is good but the writing is bad, the story reads like a broken record and the author desperately tries to add foreshadowing into their work... It didn't really hold well. Props to the author, the story was planned out and doesn't involve the classic endless face slapping tropes but events are too disjointed and lack real story telling. Nearl 100 chaps in and all I read were out of sync short stories that came about without reason. There is no direction for the story, an MC who is a side character could work IF the fic has a goal but! Thw goals of the MC are not really clear, he shuffles between 2 worlds and has different goals for each. His motivations are all over the place which ia what allows him to act various roles but with no clear personality the MC just turns into a deus ex machina. If something crazy occured, its because of the MC, how? Next chap will be a full explanation of how it happened. What irks me is the author writes about trying to improve his writing but he follows the same formula continously. Though since this has 4k chapters, I'll stick to it and see, maybe his writing will get better but if it doesn't I'll write a comment about it.
Just bland overall, fortunately the story stopped releasing. Maybe the author realized how bad the story was and dropped it and writing altogether. I don't care if english is not your 1st language, google docs could fix the hundreds of errors that persist from chap 1 to 100+ Story wise, it reads like random ramblings of a madman. There are books that read that way BUT such books are created for art and creativity. This is a fanfiction, a world mixing DC and Marvel, the MC is a kaiju, there are dozens of ways to get things right and the author just... Doesn't k ow how to write a story. 1st person perspective is the easiest to write and the author even failed at that. The story cuts off and starts once more in disjointed times and random locations with random sometimes just (???) POV's I get it, mysterious yeah, USE FUCKING 3RD PERSON AND DESCRIBE SOMETHING FFS. The world exist already, characters and powers as well. Yet every character reads the fucking same! He just created random side character with X personality and slapped on Iron Man/Nick Fury/Reed Richards face on it. I don't even know how some people say its good. I could picture the scenes thanks to the borrowed world and characters but the storytelling is so disjointed that it becomes a hassle to try and understand. I spend more time trying to figure out what the hell the authors trying to portray and less time enjoying the story. It's not even the good kind of confusing, its confusing in the "trying to make out what a 3 year old is saying" kinda way. The authors a toddler and I feel really let down, 100 chapters in and ZERO progress. The only thing noteworthy was the consistency of the author. Byt whats the use of consistently realeasing random BS? TLDR: Not worth it even jyst to past time.
First chapter was great, next chapters were awful. 100 chapters in and I lost all my time reading this fic Writing: MTL quality, I don't mind authors starting with bad English but after 100 chapters and still having the same issues as chapter 1 makes the story just hard to read. Update: good, but slowing it down for better quality cpuld be better. Story Development: Had potential but the author decided to write blandly, not using the vasics such as Chekov's gun, the words read end up being worthless drivel since not a single bit of information shows any value. Things end up happening spontaneously or "Just Because". Character Design: THERE IS A WIKI, ALL YOU NEED TO SO IS READ IT TO UNDERSTAND A BIT OF PERSONALITY. Characters end up bland, the MC... gas no personality, its like every experience he has does nothing to him. He's perfect, he knows all, if he does not agree then it is wrong. I've read a lot and this character design follows the amateur method of, "Do something, explain later". Please, remeber that its vetter to show not tell. Show a person get emotional, act on that emotion then commit an action. Don't make a character commit an action THEN explain why he did that. It only works in anime and manga or VISUAL works since we could SEE whats happening. World Background: Mystery is good but writing exposition should only be done to reveal a mystery. Don't make an exposition and hold back to contain mystery. If you want to keep things secret then keep it secret. Also, don't make us read the MC's thoughts. The MC works on conjecture, he believes his truth so just make him learn what he knows, reveal what needs to be revealed fully when you are ready, don't edge, that just makes the story less mysterious and more stupid. A good premise, had potential but qith failed execution. Rewriting of the story is possible, pre hogwarts arc cpuld be shortened to 1 chapter, remove all useless exposition. Keep the MC's thoughts on magic and the world to himself. Make him OP, it doesn't matter, but write it in a way that makes readers want to k ow why he is so strong. How he got so strong and do this by making MC correct his understanding on magic. This way you have a GOOD reason why an OP MC is going to Hogwarts. Hope this helps
I don't think Hogwarts would allow such an act, feels like the author did not properly do any research and just wrote based on what others told him
The story startes off well, interesting premise and all that. But as the story progresses it felt more and more like a story written using AI. It also did not help that there already exists a story about a certain professor at hogwarts who uses ancient runes. The initial plot involving Lockhart and the chamver of secrets was fine. But coming into the Prisoner of Azkaban storyline made it all too obvious how the story progresses. I ignored it initially but with Hermione showing interest in the MC and becoming his assistant. The MC acting the way he did, even the way he handled Harry being attacked be dementors... Honestly this feels like a fanfic of a fanfic and since I read the ancient rune story it really irks me as I read this fic. Hopefully the story gets more originality. I mean its a fanfic but, come on, taking the ideas of other fanfic authors and reusing them with a different OC is just plain laziness. It starts to feel like the author just copy pasted the whole ancient rune story into chat gpt and asked it to rewrite the story with an MC who was from the witcher and with a different name.
I'll endure, I had a desire to drop the story after the mc went and said he'll join the marines to change the world. If the MC did not know about the world government and the marines and one piece in general, I could still accept it. But the MC LITERALLY KNOWS ABOUT THEM he even hates the World Government and thinks he can make a change through the marines despite all this. If the MC was forced to join by Garp or anyone then it wpuld have been fine. But he had the freedom of choice and decided to make the worst of all choices. Also, before you say its not the worst, the MC had endured a life where he was forced to do things he didn't want to, he lived as a slave and want to do good. Do you think the MC, with all his experience would choose to run to the Marines and WG given all that? It felt so out pf character that I just want to drop the story at this point but I'll give ot spme time and consideration. Everything was good up to that random 180 but maybe, just maybe it will get better... Hopefully...