June_Burman

This is a great story, characters develop well - but thin, settings are full and visual. Sadly many word, spelling, grammar, gender, and plot slips --- needs a good proofread for reader comfort.

So many mistakes - spelling, grammar, wrong words but it was definitely not Ashley with Veronica throwing stones. possibly Asher more likely Lori or Ky....if you have a twist make it legit and more effective if John found out before he died.