Samuel_Levi_5748

Comedic in my opinion, great world background but should explain the physics more, 10 lightyears would take 10 years to reach at light speed, or 120 months, so in that sense he was going 120x faster than light to reach the city

So the thing is, you should probably tone down the way their conversation is done, like it's great and comedic but some phrases are probably a bit too ineffective. And another thing, keep it up, your newer chapters definitely have a much better format and spaces for sentences and paragraphs compared to your first chapters, if you have time you should reformat the first few chapters you think are still not as good as the newer ones, so people don't just read the 1st chapter and say "This sucks". Personally so far I don't hate this, it's not my favorite but it will be a great read when I'm bored because of the comedic plot