I love the story so far but maybe work a bit on fleshing out the characters. The world feels immense compared to character development, but the potential is there! Keep working at it.

The background on the world seems intriguing and well placed, the characters need a bit of fleshing out- but I like the direction so far very interesting so far.

I love the story, a little choppy but could lead to a really interesting plot line keep it up!