Hillstrider

Well, where should I begin? While I would like to sugar-coat the author's writing, the way they develop the story, and the information the reader swallows, I would like to give an accurate review of the story thus far. However, with the story being only two chapters long as of me writing this review, this should be taken with a grain of salt as the author will inevitably improve, and they have asked me to write this review very early. Let's start off with the writing quality. There may be grammatical errors, but these don't deter you from the plot, so they're not a big deal. The only problem I have is the lack of quotation marks or knowing who is talking to who, and if the character is actually talking or not. The story develops at a normal rate, with the first chapter being significantly shorter than the second, although in the first one it does seem like the author is writing the story in such a way that it feels like they're trying to push the reader on with the story, seeking to "get on with it" already. The character design is solid, but the main character suddenly becoming a gigachad within the first chapter out of nowhere makes it feel a little like they're rushed. I cannot write on the updating stability as of now with only two chapters, so I am average on it. The world background is fairly well described, with the reader knowing their surroundings. All in all, I believe the writer is using their raw talent to write. While talent is excellent to have, I believe talent alone cannot suffice without experience.

A very well-written story, albeit morbid. The author's vocabulary is incredible and it gives the reader exactly what they're looking for. The story development is interesting, with the main character finding his true potential in just a few chapters. This also is another excellent choice as it is flexible, allowing the author to either take the character development slow or to quickly make the character powerful, or something in between. The author's use of the first-person narrator is a great choice for a story such as this. It sometimes changes to third-person, albeit very infrequently. The character design is unique, with the characters being recognized just by their word choice, which makes for an excellent experience. All in all, this novel is a great way to pass the time, or just don't binge on it too much!

Thank you for noticing the lack of purple prose! I'm going with little to no blue and purple prose, especially purple prose since I'd like to aim for both beginner and experienced readers alike, and as such having an incomprehensible/inpenetrable drawn-out description of something can give readers headaches, especially to beginners. The text will become shorter and shorter over time as the reader can imagine their surroundings without the need of world building in order to focus on action rather than unnecessary visuals!

An incredible, well-written story. The writing feels extremely satisfying. It almost hypnotizes you! The broad vocabulary really enhances the story. The character development is well written and the action scenes are well delivered. The author develops the story in a way that really makes you feel the emotions of the characters, keeping you on edge the entire time. The characters are described in a way that builds their image in your mind with ease, with dialogue that discerns them from other characters without the author having to write "said X" or "y replied". The world takes place in a mostly urban environment, during modern times. The author describes the world around the characters in a way that allows the reader to imagine the environment and how they would expect it to look. All in all, this is a great read for both beginners and experienced readers alike.

Amazing writing, this instantly gets anyone hooked :D

Here we go! <3

It's a very original concept, thrusting the reader into a game of chess. Not literally, you see. You'll have to read to understand what I mean. This is an action-packed novel, the fights might sometimes seem like the main character is overpowered, although I think that just adds spice. The writing can be enhanced and the author is actively improving, although for now I'd give the writing a passing grade as the author's thoughts and expressions are still being understood by the reader.

I don't recommend writing "each other" that many times in one paragraph! D:

That's upsetting :c

The title kinda feels too similar to the second chapter :O