It's not bad I get the character is all over the place and you may need to cut out fate but other than that I like that you are doing Haki and Magic.

Why not Hinata or Tenten I don't like Ino or Sakura

Do not make the Mc a Marine

So the story is gonna go like he will help Rias then get her then he starts trainingher peerage then sona's peerage then he helps everybody then he helps more people then he goes to the Underworld and work for the three factions some more he might as well just join a peerage

add Mordred

Runeas to

add serafall to the Harem

is this a harem

What show is the fanfic for

JUST serefall

SEREFALL

So it's just Goteia being in Rias Peerage

KILL HIruzen and Mito they are so annoying.

Will he still betray whiteboard

don't make him into a marine that is so boring

THIS IS LAME ALL HE DOES IS TRAIN AND SUPPORT CHARACTERS THATS IT

MORDRED

Why didn't he kill Akainu Every one piece fanfic never kills an admiral

YOU GOT TO Kill Akainu

THIS IS REALLY GOOD