BeastBear

Well let's say he is about to enter the room in which his gf is wrestling with another dude and he gets a system and the mc is like welp I see it so it must be real, WTF, at least try to show some doubts that appeared in his mind, I understand that dragging the acceptance of system for multiple chapter might make it boring but at least try to show it in a single chapter, then most of the characters are like in the class are like, yep now he is smart enough to solve a super hard calculus problem while yesterday he was almost failing in his grade, like what, you ask yourself if this was real life and one of your classmate did that, what would your reaction be, then there's a lot f places where it's literally AI, like I have been using ChatGPT for almost 2 years now and I can recognise stuff written by it from a mile away, in fact anyone with a little bit of experience can do it, and lastly, let me teach you a golden rule of Novel writing which maybe you never bothered to learn, if your first five chapters are bad, people will see your entire novel as bad. That's because those who have spent time reading a variety of novels know that it's true most of the time. Now let's talk about the background, The MC toured the whole city in his car, and you didn't even bother describing the scenes he saw, he went to the school and it was a short description of the hallway then the classroom, and the lily girl, like one moment we are at the MC's Pov and all of a sudden you started to describe Lily's involvement, and I have read a few novels with similar setting of introducing a cold goddess who comes from a super rich background but is unable trust anybody because of family issue but their introduction was subtle, like in one novel, the mc goes to the library where he sits on the seat that was right next to the girls usual seat thus leading to an interaction between them and then the author went on to explain some stuff about her before focusing on the main story and he gradually introduced more of her character in the next chapters alongside their interaction. now if you don't see a problem with your novel that's fine ig, each to their own taste.

2 months to go

people have to move on, their responsibilities force them to.

so only one more year to go, let's see uf your prediction is true or not.

overflow is one of the most famous hentai

now this right here is just the author settinf the stage for fl to look better

really mind, really, you have to think about something dirty even here?

I can smell the cliche plot of mc awakening the weakest powers and getting laughed at but the system coming in clutch to support him from over here

It would be good if you add some arts for them or their descriptions, because I am still not sure how they look